一等奖

上海 毛忆南 （1995m6y9n）

Spring Rain

spring came (Spring comes) quietly with the gentle rain. Because of the rainy days, it is not very freezing and not too hot in spring. It is warm outside. The temperature feels (makes me feel) comfortable. Some animal (animals) wake up and some lives grow up too. Because of the rainy days, it is always clear outside. Because of the rainy days, the trees turn green. The (and the) plants begin to bloom. Some bees sit on the flower and gather the pollen. The ice melts and it is beautiful. I like walking in the gental (gentle) rain. Maybe somebody would say, "oh it's bad ,it is going to rain now.”But I don't think so. I don't like the thunderstorm either, but if it is rainy in spring, it must be a gentle rain. I like the raincrops (raindrops).It is cool and wet. The rain scene is also very beautiful. There are different kinds of umbrellas everywhere. The green grass, colorful flowers (green grass and colorful flowers everywhere). What a beautiful scene. If you enjoy your life, you may feel that everything is beautiful like me. Observe the things around you, you will find your happiness.

简评：文内容丰富，表达得体，句子的使用十分到位。有个别的拼写不准确，还有一些时态把握的不准。建议以后多阅读，多朗诵，增强语感，丰富自己的表达方式，你的英语水平一定会有一个大的突破！本文对于复合句的把握相当准确，只是有少量的语法、句法错误。涵盖了所有的内容要点，达到了预期的写作目的。

二等奖

上海孙天池（meigui1998）

Spring is coming, spring light follow in the footsteps of the girl came to our side,(不太明白你这句话想表达什么意思)the land became a vibrant(vibrantly), dazzling a good spring. At this time, the misty rain is coming gently, drizzling down on the ground. (你想说蒙蒙细雨吧，这样才是正确的表达方式)as the same fine line. After the rain, I appreciate the beauty of Spring. Step into the Botanical Garden, my eyes are trimmed with a dew of the grass. Just finished(After) a spring rain, the trees on the Indus greedily sucking the spring of mannose in the spring under the new breeds vitality. Muk Min withered tree off the winter clothes, put on a fresh spring, it is the spirit. Although the evergreen pine four seasons, but spring appears to be more green(greener). From a distance, like a pine tree is being reviewed by soldiers. Yung grow more numerous, as an open green umbrella. In a flower bed to be outdone, one of the most beautiful thing is to open a Chinese rose. Chinese rose colors, red Sihuo red as flame, the powder may Xia?, white like snow. They posture million, and some heads held high as if to show off their other flowers; through some of the leaves, look to the sky as if in appreciation of the beauty of spring; some hiding in the leaves, like a shy girl ; There's his head, as if whispering in with the other spent. Other flowers are also very United States, there are daffodils, roses, cockscomb. . . . . . To issue short bursts of jasmine fragrant smell Qinrenxinpi. Breeze blowing, the flowers are bent down, nodded, as if in the spring to the small girl. There are a few birds chirp(chirping) in the trees and cried, as if to say: "Spring is coming, spring is coming." Its call for the spring brought a lot of vitality. At this time, I really wanted to sing the song to express my full of pleasure. I love you, spring!

简评：你的文章写的十分优美，文中运用了很多比喻和拟人，非常不错，其中文章中英结合，不会的单词用中文拼音表示，十分有意思。而且单词量很大，文章的调理也比较清晰。不过你的一些表达方法并不符合英文习惯，很多单词可以看出是现查的。其实在考试中并不需要很使用很多生僻单词，只要掌握基本表述方法，多用些从句，每段结构清晰就可以了。建议多看些英文美文，学习英语的表达方式。

二等奖

山东何淼（Michele）

Spring Rain

Spring rain is more precious than (the) oil. It was a rainy night in spring. I lied in bed sleepless, listening to the rain dropping (drop) down softly on the roof. It was just like the music. I was deeply moved by it. Rain in spring is not like rain in autumn or summer. It drizzles sometimes, moistening the thirsty fields lightly and selflessly. I apparently feel the fresh breeze together with raindrops blowing against my window. spring (Spring) comes. lt's getting warmer and warmer. Everything is dry, trees, fields and even the air. Just then, it rains. lt's as soft as silk. lt washes the dirty of the earth and waters the plants and the fields. lt also waters people's hears (hearts). Farmers stand in the spring rain and smile. 　 Spring rain is as dear as oil They seem to see the harvest time in autumn. Spring rain brings water to the air. It also brings hope to people.I like weather spring .

简评：Well done! 内容丰富，表达得体，句子的使用十分到位，特别是对从句的应用，很熟练，达到了预期的写作目的。

三等奖

辽宁郑子文（scly007）

Spring Rain

Spring comes. It’s getting warmer and warmer. Everything si(is)dry,(including)trees，fields and even the air. Just then，it  rains. It’s like silk -so soft.(It’s as soft as silk). It washes the dirt of the earth and waters the plants and the fields. It alsi(also) waters people’s hearts. Farmers stand in the spring rain and smile. Spring rain is as expensive as oil. They seem to see the harvest time in the autumn .Spring rain brings water to the air. It also brings hope to people.

简评： Amazing! 本文内容丰富，表达得体，感情深入，但是有个别的拼写不准确，中国式英语的痕迹还很重。建议以后多阅读，多朗诵，增强语感，丰富自己的表达方式，你的英语水平一定会有一个大的突破！本文虽然存在一些问题，但是基本达到了预期的写作目的。要继续加油哦！

三等奖

河北岳虹男（lvsedeyue）

With the snow,spring was coming.All house(houses) was (were) covered with snow and liked white palaces.We celebrated the cycle of the new year by walking in the spring snow which was soft and thin.The falling snow just liked a dancer who had a gift for performing.At the time I would rather go out in order to dance with it than stay at home beause I loved the spring sonw so much.We made a snowman,threw a snowball to our friends,(and) shared happiness in snow.As cold the weather was,we were in high sprints.This time belonged to us to open ourselves and suck in the experience. In a word,the spring snow bring me happiness and I wish everyone happiness because of it.

简评：本文内容丰富，表达得体，句子的使用十分到位。有个别的拼写不准确。本文对于复合句的把握相当准确，只是有少量的语法、句法错误。涵盖了所有的内容要点，达到了预期的写作目的。

三等奖

山东 李晓辉 （michellebetter）

Spring rain I thingk that most of the girls like rain which isn’t heavy.They walk whith(with) others or along(alone)/That maybe very fascinating.But I like heavy train(rain),especially spring train(rain).Now,I have too much homewoke（homework） to do.Sometimes,it’s too boring.And I’m often in stressed out .S (So) when it was raining ,I always run in the rain.It’s cool.I feel(felt) the raindrop could seep into my body.I felt my blood run very fast at that moment.After that I felt excited And everything is(was) new. It can(could) also seep into the soil,so the soil would be richer.This year,the soil was too dry at my hometown.The wheat woud to die(would die).The farmers were worried.And there are(was) not much water in the water(lake),or the reservoir.But it rained two weeks ago,and these days it rained,too..So the farmars must be very happy. I think the spring rain is very important. It sometimes can chang(change) our lives.Could it touch you ?

简评：本文内容丰富，表达还算得体，有个别句子时态混乱。有个别的拼写不准确。有少量的语法、句法错误。涵盖了所有的内容要点，基本达到了预期的写作目的。

三等奖

江苏窦安琳（douanlin）

Spring Rain

Spring is coming. One day morning, I got up early. When I opened the window, I saw that it was raining heavily outside. I was very sad because of the bad weather. On my way to school, I found a little green on both side(sides) of the street. Even there was a small white flower among the green. I was so surprised of the flower. How did it live up! I know(knew) that spring is coming. After the rain, there is (would be) much green you can find green (去掉) everywhere. I am happy that everything in the nature is growing with the rain. I love(the) spring rain!

简评：You did very well ! 文章感情真挚，描述了对于春雨的真挚感情，语句也比较通顺，只是在时态的把握和运用上还需要多练习！